Altarra- Long Overdue Update May 27, 2004 12:52:53 GMT -5
Post by Zidagar Dinoman on May 27, 2004 12:52:53 GMT -5
CELS said:Yay! A new standard representation for the Archaios subsector. This puts us back in the lead! ;D
Nice work, Dinoman. The Altarrans are starting to sound very greek now, almost like the fictional societies described by Plato. This is cool enough, except I was planning on having a very greek theme for Archaios. Perhaps we can work out an explanation for this, with Altarra being partly colonised by Archaians, or receiving much help in colonization by Archaios? There's only so much armies can do alone, after all.
Having the Archaians help colonise/settle on Altarra would be great. Much of the greekness comes from last semester's greek and roman history class. The all infantry approach of the Altarrans/Archaios. is also very greek.
CELS said:Anyway, here are my comments. Quite a few of them, but don't take that the wrong way. It's generally a good sign
1) The Tithe Grade is solutio secondus. Did you use Zholud's grade system or my own? Reminds me that we have to agree on that....
I don't remember off the top of my head. We should finalize it though, kinda like the colors for Battlefleet Anargo. I've got some ships to paint up.
CELS said:2) Gravity is very low, isn't it? It would make the Altarrans somewhat physically weak, I think, compared to other troopers. Just a few weeks onboard Navy ships wouldn't be enough to adapt to 1+ g, I think.
Granted, 0,66 g is still far from zero gravity, but astronauts spend months of training to recover from weeks in zero gravity. I suspect it might take a while to adapt to 1 g after 20-30 years in 0,66 g...
Perhaps you can increase the density of the world? Increase its mass.
I suppose I can do either or both. I'll play around with the numbers. .66 g's was what I rolled on the generation system, and wasn't sure if I could change it.
CELS said:3) Life forms. With the world having an incredibly advanced ecosystem before it was colonized, that makes terran terraforming very difficult. It has been 5 millennia though.
How much of the planet has been terraformed in M41? I suppose it can't all be 100% terraformed, otherwise the Troxies would be extinct.
The native plantlife was pretty usable by the colonists, and Imperial crops had little difficulty growing one the native species had been removed. Near cities and in agricultural districts, standard human crops (corn, beans, wheat, apples, oranges, etc.) have been adapted to the enviroment, but in the wilderness things are pretty much they were 5,000 years ago.
The Troxie are all but extinct anyway, living only in Nadar's jungle.
CELS said:4) Salaries. Everyone is given enough daily wages to "purchase whatever goods they need". What does this mean? Enough goods in order to survive? Do the Altarrans have no luxury? Is there no difference in economy between the world's highest standing officials and its most lowly farmers and workers?
Luxury is a relative term Basically Altarrans are all equal, with the highest governmental offical (the Governor) living in the same manner as the farmers, artisans, and soldiers.
CELS said:5) Religion. You left this paragraph with an unfinished sentence ("is to"...?). Reading about the "Imperialist" religion reminds me that we should work out different directions within the Imperial Creed....
I made an attempt at this on Portent a while back, but I guess the post is lost now..
I found the Imperialist creed in the Fluff Bible that I don't have on my hard drive. It seemed to fit the Altarrans nicely.
CELS said:6) Society and Law. This paragraph doesn't have so mcuh about law, since you write about law in the government section. Perhaps some cutting and pasting is appropriate?
CELS said:7) Trade & Tithes. The world produces 30 regiments each Tithe period. Is this one Altarran year a standard Terran year... what?
Not sure. At any given time, thirty regiments are off world. When one is de-activated or is destroyed, a new one is sent.
CELS said:8) Famous Altarran regiments. I'm not too crazy about using the names Spartans and Trojans. All but a few shreds of knowledge of the ancient history of Earth is known on Earth in M41, let alone the Segmentum Ultima.
But that's my personal opinion. I have heard of people who disagree with me, and I remember a Space Marine chapter called Sons of Sparta appearing in White Dwarf.
I was just searching for names. I think most will be named after different types of swords and knives (Scimitars, Broadswords, etc.).
CELS said:9) Psychology. You say that Altarrans don't like Non-humans. Do you mean Abhumans?
Non-human, meaning Eldar, Tau, Tyranid, etc.
CELS said:10) Founders. Atillans and Tallarns co-founding Altarra is fine, though it's a long trip. Cadians... I think I may have protested about this before. It's a long way from Cadia. A long, long way. And I'm pretty sure there's plenty of action for the Cadians in Segmentum Obscurus, making it unlikely for them to reach this far into the Segmentum Ultima.
The Cadian fluff states that even on the eastern fringe there are colonies based around mustered out Cadian regiments (check out the new IG codex.) I figured that four regiment wouldn't be missed that much.
CELS said:11) History. The soldiers who colonized Altarra were both men and women, right? In the text, this is not entirely clear, IMO. Perhaps you should put more emphasis on this?
I think more emphasis on the sexual/racial equality is needed as well. Altarrans hate aliens, not each other!
CELS said:PS: Where does it say that Rough Riders can't have Combat Doctrines!?!? This is terrible news!!
They can only use certain doctrines. They are not "guard infantry" and therefore are ineligible to use Sharpshooters and Hardened fighters.